My writing
Have you ever moved to a new house? Well, I have it was when I was 5 in January of 2010. I had moved from a house that was small and not suitable for a family of four. Mum and dad said, "we should upgrade to a house with more space and a bigger lawn to fit a pool and a swing set and lots more." So me and my brother could do something outside. On the inside me and my brother had 2 Xbox 360, we only have one now and we also had 2 Nintendo 3ds, one black, and the other one blue. Last we had 2 Samsung tablets but they broke in a month or so.
It was time to move to the more improved house, it was roughly January of 2010 on a Monday when we moved. The family had loved the place, it was just I was a little bit scared to move to another house because "I'm not used to moving," I mumbled, to my dad,. It was the day one in the house for the whole day we wore packing up items from the old house to the new house after we had finished packing up all our belongings it was night time. Mum went down to get fish and chips for tea by the time she came back it was raining and we steal needed to unpack all of our stuff but all we had was a table and some chairs inside so we could eat. Bang!!! Halfway through tea there was thunder and not knowing where I'm going to sleep...
Hi Caleb
ReplyDeleteYou chose a really interesting topic for your personal narrative. I remember feeling nervous when I had to move house as well.
I like how you took on the challenge to add your quotation marks in the right place, and you did the right thing by asking for help when you were unsure.
For the next narrative writing we do, I want you to be really clear with what your conflict is and how it is going to get resolved!
- Miss Birtch